Day 3 -Substack Poet's Collaboration :: Poem 1 Looking for The Middle Stanza. Who's Got it?
5 Stanzas -One Line/One Poet Per Day M-F
Line One, two, and three…
Before The Ocean Found Us
We Slept Our Hearts Away
Our Spirit was deserted
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Day 3- Line 3….This Poem Peaked, Now who will help us bring it home with Line 4
Comment Your 7 Syllable Line Today!
Thank you to Alicia M. Rodriguez and David Silva for helping bring this poem to life with line-2 and 3
2-More to Go:
For those that don’t know We are Building a A Collaborative Poem :
built slowly :
Monday through Friday :
five days,
one line at a time,
all of us adding breath to the same small fire.
Each day I’ll repost the poem, tagging whoever got the most upvotes on their line.
You all will hopefully Restack, tag your poet friends, and soon we’ll have a:
Substack Collection of Original Poems - Created By So Many Amazing Poets -
Something that none of us could have written alone.
The form we will use this week (and perhaps onward) is a:
Variation of a Cinquain: Five lines, Seven syllables each… Short enough to whisper. Structured enough to surprise you.
Here is the first line to melt into and out of:
Before The Ocean Found Us
We Slept Our Hearts Away
Our Spirit was deserted
Recently something made me smile.
Pretty Lights — the producer Derek Vincent Smith and Co-Producer named his first five albums in a way that forms a perfect cinquain variation. It is rumored to be based off one of Michaels Poems Titled.
Pretty Lights
Taking Up Your Precious Time
Filling Up the City Sky
Passing By Behind Your Eyes
Making Up a Changing Mind
Spilling Over Every Side
Absolutely Brilliant…. Like So Many of Their Songs
So this week, we begin our own.
The first two lines are
Before The Ocean Found Us - Ash-is Poetry
We Slept Our Hearts Away - Alicia M. Rodriguez
Our Spirit was deserted - David Silva
What’s line Three??
Comment With Your Input and WE Build From There!
We slept our hearts away
“Our Spirit was deserted”